成考英語作文:2015年湖北卷寫作一!
2019-2-5 來源:本站 點擊:
一、2015年湖北卷真題回放
請根據以下提示,并結合具體事例,用英語寫一篇短文。
Questioning is a bridge to learning. When you begin to doubt something and search for an answer, you will learn.
注意:1.無須寫標題;2.除詩歌外,文體不限;3.內容必須結合你生活中的具體事例;4.文中不得透露個人姓名和學校名稱;5.詞數不少于120,如引用提示語則不計入總詞數。(滿分30分)
Seeing is believing①.Never believe in anything in a hurry before you make a careful research.
From childhood,I was told the saying the great fish eat up the small. I had been taking it for granted until one day when I knew the saying is not always right②.Last year, my father bought me a pet fish as my birthday present with some shrimps as its food.I kept them together in the fish tank, watching them swimming free and happy③.However, later in the afternoon,I was surprised to find it was the fish that was dying. And the killers, the shrimps were chewing on the body④!
So we should have the courage to question,and on no account should we follow anyone like sheep. The more we question, the more we will learn⑤.
二、解析:
①Seeing is believing以言語開啟論述,有統領全文之效,不僅簡潔明確,且貼合所給材料主旨,十分恰當。作者語言組織和構思能力可見一斑。
?、赽een taking完成進行時,表示過去相信,至今仍相信,運用準確恰當,表達相當完美。when引導了一個時間狀語從句,復雜句式也是亮點之一。
?、踳atching現在分詞表狀態,作者請熟各種高級表達方式,文章鮮活生動,充滿動感。
?、躠nd the killer置于句首,不僅過渡自然,且有突出口吻,加強語氣之效。
?、輙he more...,the more... 語句簡潔,表達準確,說服力強。該句呼應段首觀點,非常完美地闡述了文章觀點。
三、名師點評
本文結構緊湊,條理清晰,論據充分,頗具說服力。行文中語言簡潔,直觀明了,表達方式多樣。作者在行文過程中熟練使用了高級詞匯和多個高級句式,加上長短句的搭配,文章錯落有致,韻味十足,語言的表達效果得以體現。末段用一句話總結、重申了質疑在學習中的重要作用,完美印證了論點。高級詞匯的恰當運用,有效提升了文章的得分檔次??傊?綜合多方面因素,本篇都不愧為一篇值得學習和借鑒的好文。
四、譯文
眼見為實!在認真研究之前,不要急于相信任何事情。
從小就有人告訴我,大魚吃小魚。我一直認為這是理所當然的,直到有一天我知道這句話并不總是正確的。去年,爸爸給我買了一條寵物魚作為我的生日禮物,一些蝦作為它的食物。我把它們放在魚缸里,看著它們自由自在地游著。然而,下午晚些時候,我驚奇地發現快死的是那條魚。而兇手就是那些蝦米,卻在撕咬魚!
所以我們應該有勇氣去質疑,決不應該像羊一樣盲目跟隨任何人。我們問的越多,收獲越多。